Wednesday 18 April 2007

Atlas Comes Clean

(Apologies to William Carlos Williams)

This is just to say
That I dropped the sky
And left the sun
Lying in the snow.
Forgive me,
It was so very
Heavy
And no-one seemed to notice
Until everything started to
Melt.


© GB 2007

thanks to Augustinclair for the line "The sun lying in the snow"
http://www.mybloglog.com/buzz/members/augustinclair/


10 comments:

Crafty Green Poet said...

Excellent, succinct, thought provoking and slightly amusing too.

Clockworkchris said...

Gave me a great laugh. I think you need no apologies. You got right to the point which is nice. I can't seem to do that.

Augustin Clair said...

Hey, nice ! Very good use of the verse. It gave i think a bitter-sweet direction to the poem. And a nice ending.

We should do a joint poem one day.

Anyway, great job.

gautami tripathy said...

Thanks for this short verse. To the point and full of irony...

Regina said...

Simply perfect! It made me smile!

Beaman said...

Perfectly written. It had that wonderful drop of irony seeping all the way through.

Deb said...

Smart poem--brilliant in fact.

Sandra said...

fantastic poem!

Jessica said...

love the wcw tribute

kylebeabo said...

An excellent poem. I liked it a lot.